inclusion and participation of persons with disabilities in community activities: The role
Below comments are from adviser advising me on what the committee is expecting or looking forward to see in my thesis. They have already made some comments on the actual work using yellow text.
The attached file is the actual thesis. Please kindly glance through and let me know what is next regarding service fee, and any further comments or recommendation.
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Hi ,
I have been speaking your thesis committee and we all agree that there are elements of your thesis that need more work:
Your thesis is interesting, but it needs some more work. It has been edited up to p 19.
This is what was noticed in the rest of the manuscript.
I indented paragraphs and added more information in the rest of the chapters (but no editing).
You need to do a comprehensive editing of the document.
All of the chapters need an Introduction and Conclusions.
Chapter 1 needs a section on the chapter overview (abstract of each chapter).
All of the empirical chapters need 8-10 research findings (typically 8-10 pages)
Chapter 8 seems to be the Conclusions chapter but it has a lot of data in it. I don’t know if it is another empirical chapter and he needs to add a short 5 page chapter 9 with overall key findings, and future research sections OR the keeps the findings that are there and you move the data to some other chapter(s). The former might be cleaner (adding a chapter 9).
It would have helped if you had looked at past disabilities theses and followed their template.
