Rough Draft Review Process Evaluation

Upload the document that contains the feedback from the Writing Center specialist.
Submit the journal assignment answering the following questions in at least 400 words:
Identify the top three issues your writing specialist focused on in your rough draft (e.g., paragraph structure, proper use of quotations, thesis statement, etc.).
In what ways were those issues surprising?
Describe what you learned from some of the feedback your writing specialist provided as explanations.
Was this feedback helpful?
Evaluate the usefulness of the paper review tool.
In what ways did this activity improve your academic writing skills?
Will you use the Ashford Writing Center to review your work in the future? Why or why not?
Identify Writing Center Video Tutorials
(Links to an external site.)
that you find most useful and explain why. Also, identify tutorial(s) you found least useful and explain why.

Feedback: Summary feedback from your tutor: Hello =) My name is Alan, your writing tutor for this assignment. I have reviewed your submission and have several suggestions that will help you revise. Great job by the way! Below, you will find a revision plan in addition to the margin comments within your assignment. Note that I have not proofread the draft for every possible error, but rather, focused on larger concerns. For your revisions, I suggest focusing on: 1) Organization: You have a lot of great ideas here! However, try outlining your ideas to help you organize your assignment. What are the key or main points you want to make? Separate these into their own sections and only discuss 1 idea per paragraph. Utilize topic sentences and be sure each paragraph sticks to the topic of the given paragraph. For more information on developing outlines, click here: http:// writingcenter.ashford.edu/outlining 2) Development: Although in certain sections you develop your topic excellently, as you revise, I suggest working on your overall paragraph development. A good rule of thumb for college assignment is that paragraphs should be about 7-11 sentences long. Many of your paragraphs are underdeveloped and many of your points are not thoroughly explained. Here is a rough outline to help you revise your paragraphs, and explain yourself a bit more: a. Topic sentence that states the topic or point of the paragraph b. Give a Fact/Detail/Reason/Quote/Statistics that supports your point c. Explain this fact d. Give more Explanation & Analysis of this fact e. Give another Fact/Detail/Reason/Quote/Stat to support your topic sentence f. Explain this fact g. Give more Explanation & Analysis. h. Closing Sentence 3) Grammar/Tone: Be sure to read your assignment out loud prior to submitting. This will help you catch a lot of punctuation, run on sentences, fragment, verb tense, subject/verb agreement, and phrasing errors.If you need more assistance with this, Grammarly is an awesome tool to use for assistance with this =). Good luck on your assignment! -Alan B. =)