Write a four-to five-page synthesis (exploratory) paper that summarizes at least two
Make first paragraph more concise. End with a strong thesis statement–make sure you tell me vaccinations should be mandatory because this is what you’re arguing. You have lots of possible topic sentences in the second paragraph. Spread these throughout the paper. It looks like the entire third paragraph was taken from a source. Did this all come from the same source? After any quote, you must say right there where you got that quote. Even though this is a good example, the paragraph has no topic sentence and no analysis.
Generally: You list many references at the end, but I don’t know yet how you used them and where. Only list references you actually use in the paper. I should be able to take the author’s last name in an in-text citation and link it to the source in the reference list. Next, you must always, always use in-text citations. I think you are paraphrasing some things without referencing where you got them. Your paragraphs need work. Make sure they each have a topic sentence, an example (evidence), and some analysis. For the analysis, you will be telling me why you used that example. You MUST engage with at least one opposing view. What is the strongest argument on the other side of this issue? Engage with that view. You also need to write a little bit more to meet the 4-5 page requirement.
